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My MM fanfic

PostPosted: Mon Sep 02, 2013 8:41 pm
by loof123
Okay guys, you ready? This is it:

Spoiler: show
“I don’t know what else to say… Mister Philip Gaan, thank you for being fair with us…”

“… and I am happy that I did.”

*sounds of clapping and screams of delight as Marine goes back inside*

Marine: Jeanne? Jeanne? Where are you? You haven’t spoken to me since that fight… Jeanne? Are you angry at me? Jeanne???
*Benoit comes near her*
Benoit: What’s wrong Marine? We’ve won! We’ve ACTUALLY WON! Shouldn’t you be happy?
Marine: I am… it’s just… Jeanne isn’t saying anything. She hasn’t spoken since my fight with Dragon. Did she leave I wonder?
Benoit: Whatever the reason is, I’m sure she had a valid one Marine. Don’t worry. She’ll be okay.
*the others except the Bear rush to them as well*
Karine: Congratulations Marine. You did it.
Marine: No, we did it! US! I couldn’t have done this without any of you. Thanks…
Jack: You can reward me by going out on a date with me!
Marine: You know what, fine. You deserved it.
James: No fair, I want to go on a date with you too!
Jack: Shut up Jamal, she wants me! You can go date Merline instead!
Marine: Guys, stop it! Okay, so we need to go back to Green Grass and tell Mom and Merline that we’ve won!
Benoit: Then let’s go!
*Lord Dragon and The Sage walk in*
Sage: Marine, we need you to come with us and assign each member of your thirteen to a field where they can help people.
Marine: You guys go ahead, I’ll catch up.
Salome: Are you sure? We can wait…
Marine: It’s okay, go! They’re not gonna do anything to me. I know it.
Karine: As you wish. See you in Green Grass!
*the group except Bokden leaves*
Marine: Bokden? Why are you here?
Bokden: I want to stay with you, if that’s okay?
Marine: Fine…
Dragon: Come with us Marine. We’ll take you to the Town Hall where you can assign them.
*the group goes to the town hall*

While they are on to the town hall, Bokden approaches Marine.

Bokden: Hey, how are you feeling?
Marine: Very stressful…
Bokden: I’d give you a massage but we can’t do that as we walk. When we reach Green Grass, I’ll make a special one just for you *wink*
Marine: Hehe, thanks Bokden, I guess I really need one. I wanna ask you something Bokden… what made you join our group?
Bokden: I don’t really know. It was your determination, personality, goal… I liked it. I felt like helping you. You are a type of person that, when you enter a room, you light up everybody in it. You are really amazing.
Marine: Do you really think so?
Bokden: What reason do I have to lie?
Marine: You’re right, I do trust you.. Wow. Thanks.
Bokden: Why are you thanking to me for telling the truth? It’s the truth after all…
Marine: Thanks Bokden. You’re pretty amazing yourself. I think I might even kinda-

*BANG*

*THUD*

Marine: Bokden? BOKDEN? BOKDEN!!!!!!!!!!! SOMEONE!!!! HELP!!!!!!! PLEASE!!!!!!!
Sage: Marine, what happened?
Marine: I don’t know! We were walking, and all of a sudden, he collapsed. Look at that wound!
Sage: He was probably shot with a gun Marine. He’ll be okay. But I’m pretty sure that the intended target wasn’t him…
Marine: Who would do that?
Dragon: I have an idea.
*Dragon leaves*
Marine: Wait! Oh no, he left…
Sage: I’ll take him to our resting quarters and we’ll call priestesses for help. He’ll get better, don’t worry. For now though, you should head to Green Grass to your friends. But you’ll be vulnerable alone. We'll find who did this to him though so don't worry.
*Sage whispers something to a guard nearby*
Sage: Well, I suppose we’ll have to wait now…
Marine: Wait? For whom? I can do this alone.
Sage: No, you can’t. We can’t risk getting you killed. Ah… there is our warrior!
Marine: But that’s one of Dragon’s 13!
Sage: What better way to make peace with them? You’ll start with one of them, then the others one by one.
*The warrior comes*


now, you have one day to vote which warrior shall go with Marine. ( No LD ) The warrior with the most votes escorts her :)

Re: My MM fanfic

PostPosted: Tue Sep 03, 2013 9:39 am
by Tomas
I vote for Lady Mai. She's probably jealous of Marine and LD, so it could be interesting... 8)

Re: My MM fanfic

PostPosted: Tue Sep 03, 2013 11:42 am
by Cassiopeia
Hey, this has grown since I first read it! +::clap +::clap +::clap

I'd choose Hitomi. I think he will be trustworthy. +::Thumbup

Re: My MM fanfic

PostPosted: Tue Sep 03, 2013 1:01 pm
by loof123
Well, I think I get a vote too.
Cassiopeia wrote:I'd choose Hitomi. I think he will be trustworthy. +::Thumbup


My first choice was him as well and since not much is known about him, that gives me plenty of room to configure his personality. But I'll wait :)

Tomas wrote:I vote for Lady Mai. She's probably jealous of Marine and LD, so it could be interesting... 8)


There's nothing about LD and Marine yet, it's right after the end of MM5 +::biggrin

Re: My MM fanfic

PostPosted: Tue Sep 03, 2013 6:20 pm
by Tomas
loof123 wrote:There's nothing about LD and Marine yet, it's right after the end of MM5 +::biggrin

True, but since Lady Mai is crazy about LD, she can certainly be very suspicious...

Re: My MM fanfic

PostPosted: Tue Sep 03, 2013 6:52 pm
by loof123
Yeah, you're right. But no other comments? Is it good, bad, mediocre??? :)

Re: My MM fanfic

PostPosted: Tue Sep 03, 2013 7:11 pm
by Tomas
It's good.
I'm not sure, though - are there guns available in the Mystrock? I thought that the rifles from the ancient temples were called ancient for a reason. +::Dunno

Re: My MM fanfic

PostPosted: Tue Sep 03, 2013 7:54 pm
by Cassiopeia
Well, the thing is, you COULD take the guns out and sell them before you left the temple for good. There's a booming black market for those guns! +::O_o

Re: My MM fanfic

PostPosted: Wed Sep 04, 2013 8:02 am
by loof123
"someone" got ahold of one "somehow" +::biggrin

Re: My MM fanfic

PostPosted: Wed Sep 04, 2013 8:21 am
by Indinera
Tomas wrote:It's good.
I'm not sure, though - are there guns available in the Mystrock? I thought that the rifles from the ancient temples were called ancient for a reason. +::Dunno


they are also paian... +::surrender +::O_o

Re: My MM fanfic

PostPosted: Wed Sep 04, 2013 8:21 am
by Indinera
Cassiopeia wrote:Well, the thing is, you COULD take the guns out and sell them before you left the temple for good. There's a booming black market for those guns! +::O_o


yes i guess as a black market it could work lol

Re: My MM fanfic

PostPosted: Wed Sep 04, 2013 9:24 am
by loof123
Indy, you didn't comment or vote +::cry +::cry +::cry

"paian" ???

Re: My MM fanfic

PostPosted: Wed Sep 04, 2013 9:35 am
by Indinera
yes sorry, very good imo. loved the reply "you can date merline instead" +::biggrin

now i think the warrior to escort marine should be lord nate +::biggrin +::biggrin +::biggrin +::biggrin

Re: My MM fanfic

PostPosted: Wed Sep 04, 2013 10:58 am
by Cassiopeia
Poor thing! +::O_o

Re: My MM fanfic

PostPosted: Wed Sep 04, 2013 11:43 am
by Indinera
well loof asked, i answered :razz: